morning dew on iris
tonight, soft tulle chemise
slight shake in her signature
snail lines glitter
chance June frost
firefly’s bright tenacity
Word prompts from rosemary mint
- Haiku: Hope keeps us going (thewriternubbin.wordpress.com)
- Essential reading for those who love haiku (japantimes.co.jp)
This is a lovely poem – concise but vivid – I love the tenacity of the firefly. k.
So glad you liked it. It’s always fun to write for Shawna. Happy I could share it with you.
This is imagistic poetry at its best. It is squeezed until each words carries the explosion of the image it creates, and this leads to an emotional response. Great work.
Welcome back. I like working with words, and Shawna his a new list ready most weeks. I’m glad I could share them with you. I really enjoyed reading and catching up on posts at fourwindowspress. It had been too long.
Very strong, Yousei… the challenge of saying it with ultra word-economy seems to work for you brilliantly. Many cannot
Thank you. I try. It’s always nice when they work out. That seems to be happening more often thankfully. Hope you’re doing well. I’ll be visiting soon.
aloha Yousei Hime – oh, i like that snail line signature – a lot. way a lot.
Thanks. I like it too. Sign of good things, I’m hoping. 🙂
These are lovely similes with flavor! You’re wonderful ~Thanks dear~`hope you’re feeling better. ~Fondly Deborah
Thank you. Much better now.
Delicious. A feast for the eyes – thank you!
With a companion piece written for the Sunday Whirl Wordle list.
Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it. I’ll be over to visit your post soon.
Gave me lovely smiles.
Good. Mission accomplished. 🙂
This is perfect. Just beautiful. I think it’s very selfish of you to keep your poetry inside of you when it looks like this upon the page. The center couplet is my favorite. Thank you so much. Please write more.
I’m so glad you liked them. I wanted to use all the words (a challenge I enjoy), but they wouldn’t cooperate. I do a lot of pre-writing in my head, and it comes out on “paper” when it’s ready to be shaped into a final, readable form. I hope to write a bit more this week, but I have a lot of things to do. Big trip coming up, and I’ll be off-line for a while then. 😦 Thanks for the push to write, my friend.
Are you still spending the summer away for a job?
I have a job, all but guaranteed, but it hasn’t started yet. Yes, I’m planning to leave soon. May be gone longer than the summer. It feels strange, a bit depressing, but also very exciting. It will be great to be with my Texas family for a while.
I’m sure! You’ll have to e-mail me or write a post about it.
Definitely. I plan to use the whole experience to write from. You should start seeing posts within the next two weeks. My sister has internet (the final destination), but my mother doesn’t (second stop of journey). Look forward to it. 🙂