Tea Garden Path

dewdrop path, this dream
under a nightingale moon
cherry petals drift
up to the dusk-vined gate
I follow the scent of tea

old words ring, thoughts crash
like cairn stones in a spring flood,
scoff  and grate–each foot
falls hard on stone paths, fern-coiled
will knows which warmth feeds or stills

Seventy Six Falls
needs no more shrines–Seven Falls
soak my mouth and hands
in Izu I am not rock
simply pure water falling

gray hair remembers
its maple leaf red
finger twined, tilted
to how your breath tastes
but cannot recall you now

morn, this cotton gown,
coy pool, caught between my breasts
until mid-day earth
wakes, tugs at a silk waistband
night winds churn that deepest pond

dream fated structure,
half-moon bridge made full by quiet
never content with stillness,
flows on to tranquility

simple cup of tea
heat the water — no dawn without her
scoop the matcha — her resolve pierces stone
pour the water — she is water
stir to foam — she is content with what she is


Thank you Joseph at naming constellations for the refinery polish.
For Red Wolf Poems Prompt #212 — Polishing Silver
Classic Japanese Tea Garden


About T A Smith

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16 Responses to Tea Garden Path

  1. ladynyo says:

    nice….full and evocative. floating

  2. lesliepaints says:

    I followed the “scent of tea” and was not disappointed, Yousei.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Leslie, Thank you. Happy to have you visit. Did you read the first version? Improvement.

      • lesliepaints says:

        No. I have missed out on my writer’s links forever, it seems. I need to read more of their work, just time is not being kind so have devoted myself mostly to watercolor blogs. Bad me.

        • Yousei Hime says:

          Leslie, No, practical and realistic you. I’ve had do some of the same, and I expect even greater attrition once grad school starts. Glad you made it by. I’ll try to let you know when I post something I’m particularly proud of.

  3. claudia says:

    you wove lovely images into this…and i love the close…she is content with what she is… i can learn from here you know…smiles

    • Yousei Hime says:

      I am mostly content with the rewrite and very happy that you like it. I take away from your writing so often. It is a gift that you found something in mine.

  4. slpmartin says:

    Such wonderful images in the poem.

  5. ManicDdaily says:

    This is so lovely and vivid and fragrant, I can smell the matcha! Many lovely images morphing into others and wonderful allusions to archetypical tropes. Thanks. K.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      😀 Glad you like it. Overall, I’m feeling pretty good about it. I’ll reread it in a week or so and see how I feel then. That will be a better test of my opinion on it.

  6. Morgan says:

    Oh this is so lovely 🙂

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