Moment’s Touch

my son’s “I love you”
on voicemail

English: rex rabbit Nederlands: Rex konijn castorcreamy
day’s end–slipped between
crisp, clean sheets

words recalled

A Rex rabbit

phone conversation
with sister

from birth one corner
of his smile

Bocelli’s high note
smiles on skin

Deutsch: Gelb - Rex, Rassenkaninchen, 1,0

these deep womb aches
mixed feelings

For Margo Roby’s Poem Tryouts.


About T A Smith

Just one of the literacy scholars on this site who wants to explore writing in all its complexities.
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19 Responses to Moment’s Touch

  1. OOO I’ve missed your Rabbit writings for too long. Why? Hmm

    Last stanza — internal and visceral.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Well, a mixed bag of excuses and not a clear useable one among them. I’m starting a class soon, and I suspect I’ll use writing as a way to avoid assignments. I’m so delightfully warped. Look for a post in the near future.

  2. Today you have given me many smiles, thank you.

  3. The new prompt is up if you want to have a go =)

  4. Lindy Lee says:

    Delightful definitions…

  5. This is so beautiful and moving =) The new prompt is up I really miss your writing!

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Thank you. I’ve the best of intentions, but haven’t managed to write much lately. I’ve been cut off from blogging at work. 😦 Apparently WordPress is a social networking site. Just as well. It will get me on my computer at home and get me to writing.

  6. Geoff says:

    Beautiful poem … love the structure. I’m going to try this 🙂

  7. margo roby says:

    Love the structure. I’m going to try that today with one of the poems I’m working on about my mother. I noted the comment you made Liz taking a haibun approach to memoir. I have a note next to my mother’s poems to use haibun!

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Thank you. I was pleased even though it has been so long since I wrote in the form. If you haven’t visited Liz’s site and read, you should. I think haibun as a form for memoir is wonderful. Perhaps that’s not a traditional use of the form, but I don’t think its too far off. Isn’t that what Basho’s journey journals are considered? What a wonderful pairing with your mother’s poems. I love the idea. 😀

  8. Yousei, these are really lovely. Thank you for your (really meaningful comment). Hugs, Liz

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