A battle to forget
You can die of a broken heart It’s a scientific fact and my heart’s been breaking since the first day We met. I can feel it now aching behind my rib cage beating to a desperate rhythm: love me, love me love me please. And as if the word no wasn’t easy enough you simply held in what could have defined us, what made us. And like a lexicon with its contents being words that definitions only end up to be sad and depressing but bound in a cover that looks to be happy and deceiving and it’s this same lexicon that aches behind my ribs. Yes it’s rather morbid but I had connected the dots from point A to point B only to find that some where along the line you had lost interest in the subject. And I put up a wall built of Cynical bricks and armed it with sarcastic remarks to safeguard me. Cuz in my mind it was over, the fight, no the war the thing that had turned my every waking thought to a battle to forget but that the ache had told me to cherish. It wasn’t worth feeling like a husk, and I’ve set my own rules now and the only one who abides by them is me.
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Another poem (via text) from my youngest. (I’ve left it just as he sent it, in all its rough beauty.) 🙂
Oh dear. Very powerful. Hope he’s okay/ k.
k,
He gets better every day. Even as a teenager, one can get serious about relationships. When you’re not the one to break up, it takes time to feel everything is resolved. I’m just glad he’s writing about his feelings. I spent a week with him recently, and he was cheerful and mischievous. Both very good and typical traits for him. Thank you for reading and voicing your concern.
That’s so raw Yousei … how your heart must sing to know he feels so deeply and has the power to express it so powerfully
Geoff,
Thank you for reading and commenting. He loves words and that makes me very happy. So glad I could share this with you.
“…like a lexicon with its contents being words that definitions only end up to be sad and depressing but bound in a cover that looks to be happy and deceiving…”, is a really nice phrase. Thanks.
Todd Alan Kraft,
Thank you. I’m proud of how my son is growing as a writer.
What powerful gift of language and sensitive !
I HAVE A VOICE,
Thank you. His growth in language is a joyful surprise for me.
fascinating.
passionate.
Marty,
Welcome back. Thank you for reading my son’s poem.
He is a gifted writer, and blessings to you both and family. Ellen
Ellen Grace Olinger,
Thank you for reading and the blessings. I’m happy to share his writing with you.
There are some powerful images in this – and you should be proud that your son not only wrote this, but that he was prepared to share it with you, and then with us too. I’d love to see where he intends to put the line and stanza breaks – if that’s how he decides to develop this piece.
Tony,
I’m always thrilled when he shares something with me. I asked him if it was ok to post it and got a thumbs-up. I had the same thought about the line breaks. He said he was too excited. It just came to him and he wanted to get it down quickly. That’s the way of writing sometimes, right? I told him it’s fine. That’s what revision is for, making the thing closer and closer to perfect. Thank you for reading it.
Yousei, that is awesome. You must be so proud.
Pamela
Pamela,
Yes, I am. He keeps growing on so many levels. It is exciting and a touch saddening. Thank you for reading it.
So cool that this is from your youngest. An honest and wonderful capture.
ayala,
Welcome and thank you. It blesses me when my children do something new and wonderful. Thank you for reading and sharing it with me.
A wonderful piece of writing, and obviously a great talent.
Misky,
Thank you. He gets better every time. I love how he looks for just the right words. Thanks for sharing this with me.
Excellent!
slpmartin,
Thank you–that’s my boy. 😉
even in its roughest form, a diamond is still a diamond. Thanks for sharing this with us.
purple,
What a wonderful analogy! I’d never really thought of that, but I love it. Thank you for reading and commenting.
so cool that he’s putting his emotions into poetry…a felt write.. how old is he..?
claudia,
Sixteen going on seventeen. 😉 He’s a sweetheart and a teenager. Thanks for reading it.
smiles…so cool that this is from your youngest….they def capture the feel in it…ugh….when you feel the battle is done, particularly of the heart…i like the take charge there in the end as well, setting your own rule, and living by it…
brian,
I like it too. That kind of battle is so personal and can be so hard. He is a good guy, and I’m happy he’s writing about things as well as working past them. Thank you for reading and sharing.
Yousei … how nifty to have a young one following in your footsteps, twisting, weaving, turning and spinning words. You must be very proud. He is very good – convincing.
Raven,
Thank you. I am proud. He loves language, which delights me daily. Thank you for letting me share it with you.