A battle to forget

the rhythm of my heart

the rhythm of my heart (Photo credit: TheAlieness GiselaGiardino²³)

A battle to forget

You can die of a broken heart It’s a scientific fact and my heart’s been breaking since the first day We met. I can feel it now aching behind my rib cage beating to a desperate rhythm: love me, love me love me please. And as if the word no wasn’t easy enough you simply held in what could have defined us, what made us. And like a lexicon with its contents being words that definitions only end up to be sad and depressing but bound in a cover that looks to be happy and deceiving and it’s this same lexicon that aches behind my ribs. Yes it’s rather morbid but I had connected the dots from point A to point B only to find that some where along the line you had lost interest in the subject. And I put up a wall built of Cynical bricks and armed it with sarcastic remarks to safeguard me. Cuz in my mind it was over, the fight, no the war the thing that had turned my every waking thought to a battle to forget but that the ache had told me to cherish. It wasn’t worth feeling like a husk, and I’ve set my own rules now and the only one who abides by them is me.


Another poem (via text) from my youngest. (I’ve left it just as he sent it, in all its rough beauty.)  🙂 

About T A Hillin-Smith

Just one of the literacy scholars on this site who wants to explore writing in all its complexities.
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30 Responses to A battle to forget

  1. ManicDdaily says:

    Oh dear. Very powerful. Hope he’s okay/ k.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      He gets better every day. Even as a teenager, one can get serious about relationships. When you’re not the one to break up, it takes time to feel everything is resolved. I’m just glad he’s writing about his feelings. I spent a week with him recently, and he was cheerful and mischievous. Both very good and typical traits for him. Thank you for reading and voicing your concern.

  2. Geoff says:

    That’s so raw Yousei … how your heart must sing to know he feels so deeply and has the power to express it so powerfully

  3. “…like a lexicon with its contents being words that definitions only end up to be sad and depressing but bound in a cover that looks to be happy and deceiving…”, is a really nice phrase. Thanks.

  4. What powerful gift of language and sensitive !

  5. Marty Smith says:


  6. He is a gifted writer, and blessings to you both and family. Ellen

  7. Tony Maude says:

    There are some powerful images in this – and you should be proud that your son not only wrote this, but that he was prepared to share it with you, and then with us too. I’d love to see where he intends to put the line and stanza breaks – if that’s how he decides to develop this piece.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      I’m always thrilled when he shares something with me. I asked him if it was ok to post it and got a thumbs-up. I had the same thought about the line breaks. He said he was too excited. It just came to him and he wanted to get it down quickly. That’s the way of writing sometimes, right? I told him it’s fine. That’s what revision is for, making the thing closer and closer to perfect. Thank you for reading it.

  8. Pamela says:

    Yousei, that is awesome. You must be so proud.


  9. ayala says:

    So cool that this is from your youngest. An honest and wonderful capture.

  10. Misky says:

    A wonderful piece of writing, and obviously a great talent.

  11. purple says:

    even in its roughest form, a diamond is still a diamond. Thanks for sharing this with us.

  12. claudia says:

    so cool that he’s putting his emotions into poetry…a felt write.. how old is he..?

  13. brian miller says:

    smiles…so cool that this is from your youngest….they def capture the feel in it…ugh….when you feel the battle is done, particularly of the heart…i like the take charge there in the end as well, setting your own rule, and living by it…

    • Yousei Hime says:

      I like it too. That kind of battle is so personal and can be so hard. He is a good guy, and I’m happy he’s writing about things as well as working past them. Thank you for reading and sharing.

  14. Raven says:

    Yousei … how nifty to have a young one following in your footsteps, twisting, weaving, turning and spinning words. You must be very proud. He is very good – convincing.

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