Anaphora or Something Like It

On Awaiting the Arrival of My Sister’s Child


Sleeping (Photo credit: NoVa Hokie)

I think of you
with wonder and with envy–
a delicate bud rich with the fragrant scent of life
I think of you,
a delicate bud as yet untainted by a heavy air,
and pray.

Let roots grow deep
before the inevitable storms;
let petals lift to a bright heaven.
Let roots grow deep,
held upright by the richness of family,
this precious flower unaware of the rains of sorrow

and a sheltering prayer of love.

We Write Poems Prompt #141

This poem is a revision of a poem written 26 (or so) years ago, originally posted here.

About T A Smith

Just one of the literacy scholars on this site who wants to explore writing in all its complexities.
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18 Responses to Anaphora or Something Like It

  1. Geoff says:

    That’s beautifully sweet. Thank you 🙂

  2. neil reid says:

    Twenty-six years! Amazing and interesting.

    I like the variation is repeating phrases, along with the slight ripple as well also used. And that last line makes the sentiment of the poem more than ordinary, in one breath changing the timber of voice, the way it is delivered – more personal, more intimate, that notion of a prayer given to a newborn ear. Not understood, yet arriving like a wind. Beautiful.

    Thanks, neil

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Welcome and thank you for your visit and observant comment. I’ve always liked what that last line did for the whole poem. Of course, he was a precious babe. He started work today. It is amazing and humbling. I’m eager and tentative about they day mine own fly on their own. Thank you for stopping in and sharing these thoughts.

  3. wayne says:

    nicely done and thanks for sharing

  4. Eric Alagan says:

    A beautiful welcome mat for the Newcomer

  5. Mabel Lee says:

    I like how you’ve used the repetition in the gesture of prayer, which is indeed very fitting. Thanks for sharing.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Mabel Lee,
      Welcome and thank you. In the original draft, I had more of the structure you find in Psalms. I’ve long liked the idea of graduated echoing of imagery. Thank you for commenting and reading.

  6. slpmartin says:

    Such a beautiful wish for someone so young….truly lovely.

  7. I have to write one of these… becoming an uncle in T-4 months. 🙂

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Congratulations! I have no doubts your poem will be treasured now and later. Perhaps you can share it with your readers too. 😉 Health to mother and child … please pass on these wishes.

  8. Ron. says:

    Good take on the prompt & the repetition is totally appropriate to the subject matter. Salute!

  9. This is good and appropriate for the object of your poem. I enjoyed the read.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Thank you. It was a wondrous time. The same child just graduated from college and got his first job. Someday I’ll share the original poem with him. Thank you for letting me share it with you.

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