Monday Melting (Week 16)

the amygdala of the family
not the primitive
patriarch mastodon
examine the chess board
you’ll find him the rook
sliding on her diagonals

Picture of the typical french Mont Blanc desse...

Picture of the typical french Mont Blanc dessert. Taken in a french restaurant near the Cathédrale Notre Dame in Paris. Deutsch: Französische Maronen Nachspeise Mont Blanc. Das Foto wurde in einem Restaurant in der Nähe von Notre Dame geamcht, (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

following the click
of her tongue
no need to be anxious
the lava flow from that volcano
is the cherry
on Mont Blanc
watch her work
her amnesia spell
on all those wooly beasts

for Shawna at rosemary mint

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About T A Hillin-Smith

Just one of the literacy scholars on this site who wants to explore writing in all its complexities.
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53 Responses to Monday Melting (Week 16)

  1. Thomas Davis says:

    What an absolutely delightful poem. As usual this is simply good work. Delicious too–at least for the ears and eyes.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Thomas Davis,
      Thank you. I’ve really enjoyed reading your Keats inspired epic. I always appreciate your visits and kind comments. Wish both of you well. 🙂

      • Thomas Davis says:

        I’ve been missing new poems lately, Yousei Hime, and I keep checking, hoping… By the way thanks for reading the epic.

        • Yousei Hime says:

          Thomas Davis,
          I’ll try. Things have been very busy and hectic, and honestly, my thoughts have not been on writing. The longing is still there, just quieter than usual. Thanks for the gentle prodding. 🙂 Oh, and the epic, was wonderful to read. I kept wishing for illustrations to complete the spell.

  2. Very clever…and yummy pic to boot!

  3. Eve Redwater says:

    Gorgeous! And what a dessert!

  4. Shawna says:

    Just posted a new word list. 🙂 It’s pretty and sweet this time.

  5. BEAUTIFUL ~ Deborah

  6. Eva Von Pelt says:

    Oh, I just love this whole poem, but especially:
    …on Mont Blanc
    watch her work
    her amnesia spell
    on all those wooly beasts…

    Great : )

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Welcome. Thank you for reading and commenting. Mont Blanc seems to be capturing most readers’ attentions. Perhaps the picture helps. 😉 I look forward to seeing you again.

  7. julespaige says:

    Is that just a whipped topping or stiff egg white – I can’t seem to find the correct spelling for that?
    I can imagine your matriarch as a little powerful woman, just clicking her tongue to get what she wants ready to topple any mastodon that she perceives as a threat. And the very first to attack that yummy treat! I must admit I have not ever seen that before. You made the word list fit with a silky smooth tantalizing ease. Well done!

    I added to my story verse, here:

    • Yousei Hime says:

      To be honest, I’ve never made it before. As far as I can tell from Googling, it is a chestnut puree piled on a meringue. Here is a recipe. Glad you enjoyed the poem. I’ll visit your story verse soon. Thank you for the link.

  8. Brendan says:

    A cunning weave of neurobiology, paleontology, chess and desserts to die for, in observing He and She at work. Sort of an inkblot of the heart. – Brendan

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Welcome. Inkblot indeed, in more ways than one. 😉 It was an interesting wordset to work with. I’ve read but not commented on much of your writing lately. I apologize for the latter omission. Just wanted you to know I’m enjoying it all. When life slows down just a bit more (and I’ve caught up with my backlog of blog reading–almost there!) I’ll leave you fan love notes like before.

  9. hedgewitch says:

    This is fun, and a great job on those words, which go in a very unexpected direction, one which has me quietly drooling in a my corner of cyberspace, where there will never be a Mont Blanc with a cherry. :c Unless, of course, i figure out how to make one. ;_)

    • Yousei Hime says:

      I hear you. I’m better off not googling the recipe myself. Picture looks mighty tempting though. Thankfully I have two teenage boys and a bottomless pit beanpole husband who can remove most temptations from the house before I’ve consumed more than a spoonful. Thanks for coming by and daydreaming with me.

  10. ayala says:

    Great imagery, nice piece.

  11. ManicDdaily says:

    A whole family portrait here! k.

  12. That is language that slips and leaves a sweetness on the tongue like the chestnut cream meringue of a Mont Blanc. Wonderful!

  13. zongrik says:

    very imaginative. but the rook moving in diagonals? what would spock say???

    • Yousei Hime says:

      He’d probably scold me for thinking only in two dimensions. Weren’t they playing three dimensional chess? 😉 Love the comment and the visit.

  14. What great imagery…I specially like the last stanza ~ Thanks for sharing ~

  15. Shawna says:

    I’m trying to tear my eyes away from that picture to read the poem. 🙂

    Okay, first off, I love “She” on its own line to draw out the word and give it emphasis. Clearly “She” will be at the center of this poem.

    “you’ll find him the rook sliding on her diagonals” … Oh my gosh. I love this. He must be a rule-breaker, since rooks can’t move diagonally. He must be totally abandoning the game to chase after her. Incidentally, the bishop is my favorite chess piece. But so rarely used. 😦

    “following the click of her tongue” … Ooh, a clicking tongue can be hypnotic. I’m already thinking a bit of sorcery is up her sleeve. 😉

    “the cherry on Mont Blanc” … What a nice touch!

    Ha ha! Love the ending. What a creative combination of the words, girl. Great job. 🙂 I’m so happy you wrote for me again this week!

  16. Shawna says:

    Oh come on. You’re totally just trying to tease me with that picture! Is this to get back at me for talking about desserts all the time and messing up your diet? 😉

  17. Raven says:

    That is one “heavy” dessert! And a well spun eat. 😉

  18. brian miller says:

    dessert sounds like fun times to me you know…..nice spin on shawnas words this week as well…

  19. hobgoblin2011 says:

    Very nice work. I really think the second stanza is outstanding. Thanks

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Welcome and thank you for coming by and reading. I appreciate the comment on the second stanza. I’ll confess, I’m sure I had any deep meaning in it. I was just having fun with the words at that point. Hope to see you again.

  20. nonoymanga says:

    A very nice poem connected to an old well known pen and wristwatch manufacturer Mont Blanc. Thanks for sharing Nonoy Manga

  21. leahJlynn says:

    nice poem, I get amazed at reading for these prompt the things everyone comes up with is amazing as we all have to use the same words.

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