twenty-three years longer here yet spring snow
Usagi
The Poetic Rabbit
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The ambiguity is a plus point. Open to reader interpretation. And all this in 10 syllables.
Luke,
I agree, and then their is down-right obtuse. 😉 I’m trying to avoid that of course. Thanks for stopping by. I look forward to your visits and comments.
aloha Yousei Hime – i like the way this one line twists and spins in different ways creating different possible meanings. it feels like it will go on and on every time i read it. very cool word-way. aloha.
Rick,
Thank you. Really appreciate the interpretation and encouragement.
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I think this is perfectly Japanese….regardless the intent of ’23’. LOL!
You have quite the touch. Really read this a couple of ways, and each time, it came up deeper.
Lady Nyo
Lady Nyo,
Thank you. I go through confidence cycles, floating in the middle most of the time. Your comment was a welcome buoy.
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During one outside graduation ceremony in May…it began to snow…very large snowflakes…it made for a great photos…but not too good for the robes….enjoyed your photos.
slpmartin,
Wow! I don’t remember that happening here, but I wouldn’t be surprised if it had. Thanks for sharing that. Large flakes are my favorites too– the bigger, the softer, the slower falling the better. I usually don’t think about it, but I am very glad to have any snow, having grown up with almost none. Thank you for putting it in perspective for me. Enjoyed your story. 😉
I like that it’s vague and open for interpretation. I read it as “23 years longer, here yet, spring snow” but I don’t think that’s your intent. I just like the idea that in the middle of the past and the unexpected, you are still here. No matter what happened, is happening, or will happen, you are still here, still you, and still writing.
I put this in the wrong place, of course. I’m all kinds of crazy.
Shawna,
No problem. 😉 Makes the day interesting.
Shawna,
I’m glad something can be read from it. Sometimes I write something down and question, not only does it make the sense I’d like but also does it make any sense at all. I like what you saw (fits in with some things we’ve talked about too, lol).
ok what does the 23 years longer stand for? how long you lived there? an anniversary? so interesting you got the snow…it is really chilly here today
brian,
I suspected that might be too vague. You made excellent deductions though. I have been married for that long (ugh). It is how long I’ve lived in this state, but “longer” was supposed to suggest “longer than anywhere else I’ve lived.” Too much of a burden for one little word, too obscure. Oh well. I thought of you as soon as I saw the snow this morning, “How ironic. We were just commenting on this yesterday.” Thanks for stopping in for clarification. 🙂
smiles…thanks for the clarification on the time ref in it…post HS the longest i lived in a city was 5 years (current) state seven (NC)
brian,
I think that brevity is becoming the norm. Fewer and fewer people will live in the city they were born in, probably even the state. Happy to have you here. 🙂
isn’t that unusual for you there? the last bit of snow melted yesterday from around our house…but more is due later this week. My crocus are just now blooming 🙂 that was a cute senryu!
Jeannie,
Unusual but not unheard of. I, however, can’t ever seem to get used to snow on or after Easter. We really didn’t have much snow this year, so I can’t say watching it fall is unwelcome . . . at least I like it. Thanks for the comment. I’m not sure if the senryu works without the picture context, but it I tried. Here’s looking toward the spring.