flash of blue
from fence to sky
first warm breeze
Usagi
The Poetic Rabbit
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Shiteki Na Usagi 
Love the haiku! 🙂
ElizOF,
Welcome and thank you. I noticed a post of mine appeared in related articles at your place. Love it when that leads someone somewhere, including me. I’ll be back over to read at your place soon.
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So glad spring has arrived! Hope for lots of “splashes” and “warm winds” in your life this spring!
New View From Here,
Glad you enjoyed the haiku. There is something delightfully flattering about having one’s own phrases tossed back. Thank you for your visit and warm wishes. May yours be a wonderful spring and summer as well.
Nothing like a warm breeze to bring spring thoughts to mind.
slpmartin,
Definitely. 😉 It was so wonderful today that we sighed and smiled every time we walked outside. Inside too a few times.
Clapping! I’m ready for spring and saw my first bluebird at my feeders last week. I like the thoughts this haiku conjures up in my brain, the strongest of which is a connection of sky and ground through the bluebird and the wind. It reminds me of us all interelating. Creative, Yousei!
leslie,
Thank you. It is one of my favorites today. If it is still one next month, I’ll know it’s pretty good. 😉
This is excellent!
Raven,
😀 Thank you.
nice…i like much…we had a lovely spring like day here today an i was out soaking it up….def like all the fffff…smiles.
brian,
You should have had more spring than me, lucky dog. I would love to live where you do. Mmmm…maybe closer to the mountains though, like in them. 😉
flash of blue
from fence to sky
first warm breeze
I always love alliteration in haiku; yours creates a nice dance from one line to the next: flash, from fence, first; blue, breeze
“Flash of blue” is an apt description of the first teases of spring, as it appears and disappears repeatedly before it finally decides to stay, coming in flashes.
Your second line leaves me wondering what happens in the mystical slivers between fence and ground, as if that realm is not susceptible to the minds of the seasons. It makes up its own rules, a small earth-bound world unto its own, likely undiscovered by too-tall people and so-small ants.
Shawna,
That’s probably an accurate reading of how I most often view the world. My view is rather limited, focusing on what catches my eye. I’m sure I don’t look up very often. Aren’t we all pretty much trained on the small world within our limited sight range? Still there are worlds within worlds even in those spaces.
The haiku doesn’t clearly describe a bird though. I wonder if I should change that first line to something like “blue feathered flash” or “blue bird flash?” I really like it how I originally wrote it better.
I like the idea of leaving it open for varying interpretations and unlimited possibilities. I did notice the bluebird picture the first time I read it. But this time, I was just thinking about a spring sky, the changes in hue, feel, and temperature. Not limiting it to a bird in flight.
Shawna,
I agree. I think putting the bird into the poem does limit the poem’s possibilities. I also don’t think it limits the haiku nature either. So…it stays as originally posted. 😀
I would have loved to see that!
Your haiku could have been from here.
sandy,
Yes, the picture is very close to what I actually saw. It has been just lovely today, hovering around 60F…just amazing.
Very nice.
spring morning
the color orange
warms me
fiercebuddhist,
Your comment, the perfect compliment. 😉
Oh my gosh, I love the color orange. If life could be captured in a word, it would be “orange.” Whatever that means. 😉
Shawna,
There is something wonderful about just the right shade of a color. 😀
Beautiful image and haiku…I really like “from fence to sky”. Lovely colors on the bird.
Fergiemoto,
I thought about this one for a while. I was so glad when the idea of using movement came to me. He was a bright bit on an otherwise brown area until he flew. Glad I could share it with you.
ADORABLE. I loved this one 😀
ajoops,
Thank you. It was like an extra bit of sunshine.
I’ve tried to capture bluebirds with my lens, but they’re fast… Here you captured one with words – lovely!
Ruth,
Like you, that may be the only way I’ll ever get one. I was taking my son to school (they had a late start today), and mother that I am, I was reminding him of what he needed to do. I almost missed seeing the bird. 🙂 So glad I glimpsed it. Thanks for sharing it with me.
Wonderful haiku and photo!
Ellen,
I wish I could have taken a photo of the little fellow (this is one WP found for me). What I saw is very, very close to that image though. When I saw him, I thought, “Warm wind, bright blue skies, bluebird … spring is certainly here. Let’s go write!” 😉