flash of blue
from fence to sky
first warm breeze

Bluebird Flying Away

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31 Responses to Spring

  1. ElizOF says:

    Love the haiku! 🙂

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Welcome and thank you. I noticed a post of mine appeared in related articles at your place. Love it when that leads someone somewhere, including me. I’ll be back over to read at your place soon.

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  3. So glad spring has arrived! Hope for lots of “splashes” and “warm winds” in your life this spring!

    • Yousei Hime says:

      New View From Here,
      Glad you enjoyed the haiku. There is something delightfully flattering about having one’s own phrases tossed back. Thank you for your visit and warm wishes. May yours be a wonderful spring and summer as well.

  4. slpmartin says:

    Nothing like a warm breeze to bring spring thoughts to mind.

  5. lesliepaints says:

    Clapping! I’m ready for spring and saw my first bluebird at my feeders last week. I like the thoughts this haiku conjures up in my brain, the strongest of which is a connection of sky and ground through the bluebird and the wind. It reminds me of us all interelating. Creative, Yousei!

  6. Raven says:

    This is excellent!

  7. brian miller says:

    nice…i like much…we had a lovely spring like day here today an i was out soaking it up….def like all the fffff…smiles.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      You should have had more spring than me, lucky dog. I would love to live where you do. Mmmm…maybe closer to the mountains though, like in them. 😉

  8. Shawna says:

    flash of blue
    from fence to sky
    first warm breeze

    I always love alliteration in haiku; yours creates a nice dance from one line to the next: flash, from fence, first; blue, breeze

    “Flash of blue” is an apt description of the first teases of spring, as it appears and disappears repeatedly before it finally decides to stay, coming in flashes.

    Your second line leaves me wondering what happens in the mystical slivers between fence and ground, as if that realm is not susceptible to the minds of the seasons. It makes up its own rules, a small earth-bound world unto its own, likely undiscovered by too-tall people and so-small ants.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      That’s probably an accurate reading of how I most often view the world. My view is rather limited, focusing on what catches my eye. I’m sure I don’t look up very often. Aren’t we all pretty much trained on the small world within our limited sight range? Still there are worlds within worlds even in those spaces.

      The haiku doesn’t clearly describe a bird though. I wonder if I should change that first line to something like “blue feathered flash” or “blue bird flash?” I really like it how I originally wrote it better.

      • Shawna says:

        I like the idea of leaving it open for varying interpretations and unlimited possibilities. I did notice the bluebird picture the first time I read it. But this time, I was just thinking about a spring sky, the changes in hue, feel, and temperature. Not limiting it to a bird in flight.

        • Yousei Hime says:

          I agree. I think putting the bird into the poem does limit the poem’s possibilities. I also don’t think it limits the haiku nature either. So…it stays as originally posted. 😀

  9. sandy says:

    I would have loved to see that!
    Your haiku could have been from here.

  10. Very nice.

    spring morning
    the color orange
    warms me

  11. Fergiemoto says:

    Beautiful image and haiku…I really like “from fence to sky”. Lovely colors on the bird.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      I thought about this one for a while. I was so glad when the idea of using movement came to me. He was a bright bit on an otherwise brown area until he flew. Glad I could share it with you.

  12. ajoops says:

    ADORABLE. I loved this one 😀

  13. Ruth says:

    I’ve tried to capture bluebirds with my lens, but they’re fast… Here you captured one with words – lovely!

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Like you, that may be the only way I’ll ever get one. I was taking my son to school (they had a late start today), and mother that I am, I was reminding him of what he needed to do. I almost missed seeing the bird. 🙂 So glad I glimpsed it. Thanks for sharing it with me.

  14. Wonderful haiku and photo!

    • Yousei Hime says:

      I wish I could have taken a photo of the little fellow (this is one WP found for me). What I saw is very, very close to that image though. When I saw him, I thought, “Warm wind, bright blue skies, bluebird … spring is certainly here. Let’s go write!” 😉

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