I used this haiku as a starting point for today’s, the prompt being “grief.
Snowy Graves (Photo credit: elefanterosado)
bitter cold ankle-deep beside three new graves
Usagi
The Poetic Rabbit
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Shiteki Na Usagi 
This is really powerful, Yousei, and gets at the heart of what a haiku ought to be.
Thomas Davis,
Thank you. Some things can only be captured in poetry. I know you understand this.
your haiku are some of the most evocative i ever read. thanks for sharing 🙂 and a lovely photo to match.
yelena,
Welcome and thank you. It is my goal this year to improve my writing, haiku especially. I’m glad I could share this with you.
The rhythm here is artful — three sets of stressed-unstressed-unstressed syllables, with “beside” in between a pair of them — strengthening the connection among the elements.
Kathy,
I wish I could claim the rhythm as art, but I was more in search of words to create my envisioned image than to create a rhythm. However, your comment has definitely given me something to consider, something ignored before now. I suspect we feel these things to an extent rather than plan them, because I sometimes discard phrases and words even though they are perfectly good for the image, discard because something just doesn’t feel/fit right. Happy to have you here. 🙂
Good poem and lovely photo.
sandy,
Welcome back. Writing daily helps to improve. Wish I could claim the photo, but it’s a WP offering. Fit the writing though, and that was enough for me this time.
Lovely, Yousei. The image and the haiku are a perfect match.
sanjuktaa,
Thank you. This was one were the haiku came first and finding the image to match my vision became the challenge. Glad I could share it with you.
Great personification of the cold in all its forms.
hedgewitch,
I thought that worked very well and that readers would recognize it. Thank you for letting me share it with you.
Excellent.
Mama Zen,
Thank you so much for stopping by and commenting. I did visit you, but in trying to read through dVerse posts and catch up on other past posts, I didn’t take time to leave a comment. I really appreciate you doing so. I’ll leave a word or two next time for sure.
lovely one…
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Jingle,
Welcome. Glad you liked the haiku. I’ll try to come by and share a poem later. Thank you for the invite.
sobering…new graves are def sobering….
brian,
It was and still is even two years after the incident. Loss of young lives is never an easy thing. It is something that should always be mourned, I think. Thank you for visiting and sharing this with me.
Excellent haiku for the photo…a fine poem IMHO.
slpmartin,
I confess to looking up “IMHO.” I sincerely value your opinion. Both haiku have roots in an accident that took place two years ago, three teens died driving to school on a very icy, snowy morning. Hard to forget something like that when one has driving teenagers. Thank you for sharing it with me.