Once
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your smile
made me feel like
being adorned with a thousand tinkling, glittering jewels,
being wrapped in silken strips of rainbow
being whirled among the pealing, delirious giggles of a celestial reel
until we landed bare
in a heap
of flamboyant joy
for David L. Harrison‘s Adult “W.O.M.” Poems
and dVerse
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“being wrapped in silken strips of rainbow” – Thats pretty great right there.
Also, I love it when form is played with. And it’s excellently done here.
Great work.
skyraftwanderer,
Thank you so much for visiting, wandering about smiling at different poems, and stopping to speak with me. I visited your place too and enjoyed it very much, especially those Chinese inspired poems. Happy New Year to you. May we meet often in the next year.
Adult? with great taste and class…
Lindy Lee,
😉 Yes it’s a bit grown up, at least at the end. I’m so glad you visited, commented and enjoyed the dance. Looking forward to seeing more of you here and at your special place.
A great word I’ve always liked… love the ending.
Laurie,
Thanks for the visit and comment. It is a good word, but often used in a negative sense. I’m glad to have put a happier spin on it. Best of the season to you.
I love your use of wording here. Made me smile! 🙂
Cheryl,
If you smiled then I did well. Thank you for visiting and commenting. I can’t seem to get my writing going lately. Too much other stuff going on. I’ll try again soon. It may not be like air, but I’m sure it’s water and nourishment to my soul.
Yousei–already commented here on freshness, energy, fun, exuberance of poem. But how are YOU!??? Hope all is well. K.
K,
Me . . . so-so at best. Things at home are complicated and depressing. Not what one would want for these holidays. I appreciate you stopping in to check on me. I’m glad you liked the poem. A satisfied reader always brings me a smile. Best to you and yours for the holidays.
This much joy makes me want to find a heap to jump in so that I can find all the fun I’ve been missing.
Thomas Davis,
Welcome and thank you very much for your visit and comment. I’m glad you felt the call to jump in. I hope you’ll always find a smile when you visit here.
Wonderful, flambouyant fun, but the first word–“Once”–made me wonder. Is it over?
Victoria,
You are the only commenter to question that. It appears so. It is a much different dance these days and no smiles involved. Thank you for your visit and observant comment. Every word should count in writing, right?
Ha! Sounds pretty great. K.
K,
It does, doesn’t it? 😉 Thanks for stopping by.
Ah, fun with and without clothes!
I can relate to all the beauteous wonder of the whirling glittered rainbow flamboyance in this sun and star dappled poem!
xo
Jannie Funster,
Welcome. Thank you for taking a moment to read and comment. I’m so glad you enjoyed poem. Look forward to returning the visit.
Ah … this was but a delight!
Old Raven,
Thank you for visiting and sharing in the dance. Glad you liked it. 🙂
My goodness, I love this, Yousei! You bring back a moment so well.
Leslie,
So glad to see you here! What do you think? Inspiring enough to paint? Let me know if it spins an image from your fertile brush.
I like the idea of all of that joy stripping ‘bare in a heap.’ Exhaustion! Lovely piece.
Stephanie,
Welcome and thank you for the comment. That “heap” is rather appealing, isn’t it. Though I think I’d like it better about seven months from now. Thanks for stopping by.
It was a poem worthy of the best uses of the word – what flames more than love, joy, color, beauty, all piled in a heap making one feel richer than Midas – the best of life – things that burn in memory when times are gray, when good times turn to ashes, when love is gone. Beautiful.
Gay Reiser Cannon,
Thank you for the visit and kind comment. I love that Midas spin. You mentioned the loss side too, which is only hinted at by a very few words. So glad you shared your thoughts with me.
I love this line:
“being whirled among the pealing, delirious giggles of a celestial reel”
Shawna,
Welcome back, my friend. I remember doing reels in grade school. I loved them. I’m not one to giggle, but there is an infectious joy in hearing such sounds. Glad you liked the dance. 🙂
landing bare in a heap of flamboyant joy…this sounds like great fun..well, there are smiles that can do this to us…smiles.. love the word flamboyant..and love the carefree mood of this yousei
claudia,
Thank you for the visit and especially for your comment. Flamboyant needed just the right setting to be seen to advantage. I’m glad you thought I set the stage appropriately. See you around dVerse and the moon.
I liked your response to the word prompt…no sure I could think of anything for that one.
slpmartin,
Welcome back. This was indeed a difficult word. It took me almost the whole month to come up with something. If I could do it in a month, I’m sure you can find a venue for this tricky, flashy fellow. Happy to see you.
you have captured beautifully how wonderfully special a single smile can make one feel…
Ruth,
Thank you. There are moments like that in life. They are part of what make one grateful. Thank you for the smile you left here.
this is fun reflection, well done.
The Orange Tree,
Welcome and thank you for commenting. I’m so glad you enjoyed the poem. Stop by whenever the wind blows you this way.
Fantastic use of the word! Loved the playful presentation as well.
tashtoo,
You caught that playfulness, excellent. That was important. I struggled with how to use that word, and just before bed the other night, it came swirling in. Thanks for stopping by.
That must’ve been one dizzy, dazzling, ditzy smile … you sure followed it over the rainbow to the pot o’ gold. Loved it … B
B,
Oh I followed it alright. 😉 Thanks for the visit, comment, and alluring alliteration. Happy to have you here.
that must have been such a gorgeous smile…and flamboyant joy ~
beautiful ~
Heaven,
Thank you for reading and leaving a comment. The smile was and still is very special. It’s just difficult to see with the weight and struggle of our years together. My boys have some of that smile. I feel sorry for the girls around them . . . sort of.
nice…a heap of joy is a nice thing…haha…nice sensuality without ever really mentioning it…only alluding…fun read…
brian,
Thanks for the visit and the read. I like using subtle allusion. I’m rather heavy handed with it at times, but when it works, it’s satisfying. Appreciate your comment.