We Write Poems Prompt 77


cold fingers
pressed lightly
against the wall
between my breasts
watch a puppy
that wall is
so thin


This poem, my response to the prompt from We Write Poems via Joseph Harker (of naming constellations and Curio), is a combination of two moments yesterday. The pup is one of two recently acquired. I didn’t expect her to live until morning, but she is eating (Man, can she eat!), running around (though wobbly), and romping with her rowdy sister.


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22 Responses to We Write Poems Prompt 77

  1. rdl says:

    wow, scary moment. 2 puppies! you are a braveheart!

    • Yousei Hime says:

      rdl, Yes. Scary and humbling. I’m afraid we lost that puppy though. Her seizures were unpredictable, as those things often are. We had them outside for exercise, and she disappeared. I looked all over our property multiple times but couldn’t find her. One of her seizures made her run blindly; I really think she couldn’t see at all during the seizure. I suspect she had one when we weren’t watching and just took off running. I wish I could find her, just for closure, but I’m sure that’s what happened. Her sister is 110% normal and full of puppy energy and love. That definitely helps. Thanks for visiting and sharing a word.

  2. Yousei, perfectly captured moments here. The puppy is adorable, I am a huge animal lover. We have four dogs, a cat and a bird.


    • Yousei Hime says:

      Thank you for your visit and comment. We have many animals too and situations like this are never easier with experience. They’re especially difficult when faced with such cuteness. She’s still having seizures, a scary one last night, but she recovers and goes on nearly normal. We’ll see and hope. Thanks for stopping in and sharing.

  3. I love the abrupt, spare words… the emotion comes through perfectly with those rough edges.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Thank you, kind Sir. Happy to have you here (and hear) and I appreciate your comment. I’m gearing up for submission to Curio. Look forward to my humble attempt(s). 😉

  4. Irene says:

    A heartstopping moment you’ve captured. Aww the pup’s backward glance is melting.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      She’s adorable, no doubt. I’m just happy that I thought to combine the two moments. I suspect they’re connected–thoughts of the puppy making me think about my own frailty. Happy to see you hear. Thanks for your comment.

  5. slpmartin says:

    Glad the pup made it…they can surprise us some times with their resilence.

  6. sandy says:

    Wow, this one works well!
    I hope she is doing good tonight.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      So far so good. She’s eating and playing and all the other puppy stuff. Glad you liked the poem. Thanks as always for your visit. I’ll be by your spot soon.

  7. nan says:

    capturing the seizure as a moment of stillness/change is brilliant. Good wishes for the pup.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Thank you. Our lives are made up of numerous but finite moments. I’m sure many more than we realize could enlighten and inspire. Thanks so much for stopping in and commenting.

  8. wayne says:

    nicely connected….nicely written and thanks for sharing

  9. mareymercy says:

    Aww poor pup! I hope she makes it. Is it distemper? our dog Sprocket had it as a pup and is now over a year old and weighs 60 pounds! But it was a heartbreaking thing to deal with.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      I hope she makes it too. It could very well be distemper. I’ve never had a dog that had it before. This little girl has only had one of her shots, so it’s quite possible. I was very sad last night, watching her and certain she would be gone by morning. She just lay on the sofa, wrapped in towels, not moving except for breathing. She’s eating her third meal of the day now, after spending a half hour outside romping with her sister. It look hopeful. Thanks for sharing and stopping in.

  10. The way you connected the two moments is so gorgeous and tender.

    Happy to hear that the little pup lived and is starting to thrive. She’s a cutie. 🙂


    • Yousei Hime says:

      Nicole, I’m glad she made it too. I was really dreading the morning, but what a delightful discovery. She’s improving but still having occasional seizures. Thanks for your thoughts on the poem. I’m pleased with how it came together. Your visit and comments are always welcome.

  11. Ruth says:

    ah, the puppy is cute – glad she made it through the night
    and I like the form here, the wall so easily thin – the poem says way more than its words… I like that too

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Ruth, I’m glad too. She really is cute, and it’s stunning that she’s recovered so well. She’s had other seizures since, maybe permanent, but what a little trooper. Thanks for the comment on the poem. I thought the moments worked very well together. Thanks again for stopping by.

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