Monday Melting (week 22)

time spent
pounding out a poultice
to strain out every sopping word
through this rough hurt
a crag impassable

Самовар

Самовар (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

so paced living
balanced bottomed need
with soft riposte
gentle accompaniment
to trust long askance
at last
bathing off the combustible years
drying in a backhand saucer
pouring each syllable
into an unflamed samovar
and slapping on the lid
someday
when steeped just right
pour a cup

for Monday Melting at rosemary mint

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57 Responses to Monday Melting (week 22)

  1. “pouring each syllable
    into an unflamed samovar”

    Any flames yet? I was just rereading this, and it’s so sad that the water is cold. :(

  2. lesliepaints says:

    I love this! It reads to me more of “Life”, a whole life and not a Monday melting. It made me wonder if each segment of our lives are just miniscule copies of the “bigger picture” and I liked that about it. When I read the line, “and slapping on the lid” I imagined trapping it all and saving it. Wow. Awesome!

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Leslie,
      Once I learned what a samovar was, the poem practically wrote itself. Shawna makes wonderfully, tempting word lists. I’m glad you enjoyed the piece. I should have another one up by the end of the week.

  3. Luke Prater says:

    riposte…askance section is inspired… think you did a great job here with the words. Nice to visit again

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Luke,
      Welcome back. I love reading your comments. I have to go back review what I’ve written, and your words make me think through things all over again. Thanks you for both.

  4. Come see me at my new crib when you get a chance. And write me a new poem. It’s been way too long! How is your summer in Texas going? ~Shawna

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Hey girl,
      Been there already and the site screams you. Poem later today. This weekend is my reunion weekend, and I’m loving it. I had a blast yesterday with around 30 classmates from high school. So many change, so few changes. Beautiful kids, beautiful grand-kids. The summer has been great so far. Catch you later at your place.

      • I’m so glad you’re having fun! We didn’t even have our ten-year reunion. :(

        • Yousei Hime says:

          I didn’t make it to either of mine. The one I attended this weekend is actually of the high school from which I should have graduated. We ended up moving after my junior year. To my knowledge I don’t know of any reunions at the high school from which I actually graduated. It was so good talking with every one. I went through the town and took pictures today. Also stopped and talked to former teacher and counselor. :) Very fun. Poem early this week though. I just got home about ten minutes ago and have work tomorrow. Long but wonderful weekend.

  5. ManicDdaily says:

    Yousei- hope you are feeling okay. Thanks for your sweet visits. k.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      k,
      Thank you for your visits and comments too. I’m doing very well. Losing a bit of weight (always a good thing) because I walk almost daily with my tyrant sister. ;) It’s something I want to do anyway, just can’t seem to overcome the couch inertia. Still catching up on my backlog of reading. When that’s done, you’ll see visits with comments attached. See you soon.

  6. Claudia says:

    pouring each syllable
    into an unflamed samovar…i like…

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Claudia,
      I’m glad I’m writing a bit more often, because it’s always nice to read your comments. I’ve enjoyed catching up on my reading but haven’t had time to comment much. Shawna offered an irresistible list of words. Samovar alone was worth the temptation. Thanks for reading and sharing with me.

  7. jruthkelly says:

    This is perfect… :)

  8. Liz says:

    I thoroughly enjoyed this! Am at the beach with the kids and grand kids and therefore not posting at the moment. Hugs, Liz

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Liz,
      So glad you liked it. :D I’ve really enjoyed your last few posts that I’ve read (but I’m very behind in my reading). Enjoy your beach/kids/grandkids time. Don’t burn! ;)

  9. This is “delicious…” the kind of words that just feel good on the palate.

  10. ManicDdaily says:

    The poultice for the words is just wonderful–the whole poem so interesting and successful despite difficult words! k.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      k,
      I enjoyed the list. Sometimes I read Shawna’s word list and think “Oh my.” This time my response was “Alright!” Glad you enjoyed the poem.

  11. Thomas Davis says:

    If cleverness with words could be packaged and sold in the supermarket, then perhaps the world could spin around a little faster, and there would be more magic than frustration. If I were packaging such words to put on the shelf for the shoppers, I’d start with this poem and stir things outward until every shopper was forced to buy a full dose of this wordcleverness.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Thomas Davis,
      I’d let you too. You always make me smile and sit a bit straighter. I should be writing more often now that school has ended and summer’s begun. You and Ethel show signs of strong gifts in wordcleverness as well. Blogging can definitely offer a support and challenge through it’s community of writers. I’m so glad to enjoy both of these through our blogs.

  12. hobgoblin2011 says:

    Great use of the words here. I love bathing off the combustible years. Well done. Thanks

  13. ayala says:

    A wonderful poem!

  14. Nice weaving of words ~ I specially like steeping and pouring it just right ~

    http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.ca/2012/07/sand-washed-afternoon.html

  15. slpmartin says:

    Some words indeed need to steep a little before being poured upon the page…wonderful verse IMHO.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      slpmartin,
      Welcome back. Sorry I’ve been away, but it is certainly good to see you here. Your humble opinion is important to me, and I’m delighted that you enjoyed the writing. I’m looking forward to catching up at your place soon.

  16. brian miller says:

    sometimes you just need to let those words steep…let the emotions steep until the words are just strong enough to pour out…smiles….good to see you…

  17. poemblaze says:

    Wonderful wording throughout!

  18. nonoymanga says:

    Yousei after i read your poem i got a feeling of relief!!! Cheers Nonoy Manga

  19. Gay says:

    If you’re in Texas – you’re melting all right. Loved this, the language so evocative, the sense of a high tea serving words just right. Well done.

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Gay,
      Sweltering on a daily basis, that’s me. Thanks for coming by and reading. I’m glad you liked it. I had some great words with which to work from Shawna’s.

  20. rosemary mint says:

    Yay! You just made my day. :) I was thinking about you this morning. I love that picture.

    This is definitely my favorite:
    “pouring each syllable
    into an unflamed samovar
    and slapping on the lid
    someday
    when steeped just right
    pour a cup”

    And this:
    “to strain out every sopping word
    through this rough hurt”

    So how’s Texas?

    • Yousei Hime says:

      Shawna, :D I’m glad. I felt bad about not writing like I said I would last week. It was a bit crazy trying to get everything ready to start work this week, but I did it. Unfortunately your promise had to be postponed. I like the ending best too. I went back and polished up the beginning so it matched the ending better. You picked my favorite bits, lol. Texas, like a good chunk of the rest of the country, is hot. However…it’s actually warmer in Michigan this week. Now that is weird.

  21. zongrik says:

    you don’t want to drink it till it’s steeped just right!!

    sonnet 41

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